Selecting Our Ideas

Before we discussed each other’s ideas, we looked at the strongest points of pride from our initial brainstorm in more detail:

With this refreshing our memories, we set about choosing our two ideas to pitch. We each take turns presenting what we came up with. Then finally we put it to a vote:

The two winning ideas are Blind Pride by Lilli; saying how Pride can change a person into something they don’t realise they’ve become. The other was Izzy/Rosie’s ideas along the same lines; that being pride of possession which in this instance was a teddy bear.

Going off the original basis of the two ideas, Lilli’s original idea was that a guy with a talent for building, fancied a girl he saw regularly at a bus top. To win her favour, he would build something and bring it to the bus stop for her. She would never acknowledge him so he would come back building something bigger. Each time she took no notice. Eventually, he would collapse under the weight of this enormous structure he’d built. It would only be the sound of the rubble that caught her attention; however, we learn that she takes out a guide stick as the bus arrives, revealing to the audience that she was blind and could never see him in the first place.

We all liked the idea of the twist at the end. However we were struggling with getting a character arc and story from it.  We tried contrasting the character’s unrecognised pride and shyness with another character that was overly confident and arrogant. However, we realised that bringing architectural integrities to a bus stop was rather unrealistic. But what we’ve realised is that the problem is not the characters or the idea, it is the location.

With this in mind, we’ve set about changing the location to a place that you’re more likely to see someone on a regular basis. A place that you go to with the intention of staying there for a while and not just waiting to move on public transport. We now have the idea of using a coffee shop for the location of this story. We’ve started bullet pointing the main events in the act structure: